He was sleeping. She noiselessly moved closer and caressed his skin. He could feel her presence, but was too tired to reciprocate. He just felt the funny tickling sensation with eyes closed. His brows creased into curls as she bit into his flesh. It felt like a sweet pain.
- X - X - X -
"Are you sure doctor?"
"Yes. It's Malaria".
[words used: 55]
24 comments:
Damn :P
U twist tales better than I do ;)
KLPD + High funda.... :p
ROFL... Your fiction 55's are getting better & funnier day by day :)
wow.. ur really becoming a master at this!!
superb twist! :)
i wud like to give u a standing ovation.i mean how on earth can u do this ? i nvr knew u wer so gr8 a fan of KISS.
*KISS=Keep It Short & Shocking
Woah!! thats a nice twist...couldn't help laughing! i was actually thought what's goin on with Abhi...all mushy mushy eh??
OMG abhishek u r on a 55F spree.
very well written. kudos :)
ps: blog finally updated afr a long long time. :p
lolz...
kool one!!
hey..
first of all nice twist as everyone said :D :D
you have a different way of writing..which I liked :-))
secondly..thanks for visiting and ofcourse thanks for blog rolling me as well :-))
will visit back soon :-))
tankiu :-))
cyaa..
whats up with the words used 55?
anyways.. it was a nice twist :-)
shock endings can only take you so far man.
Hmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmm! jhakkas! hmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmm
(hmmmmmmmmm was the sound she made before inserting that thing into him!)
@ all : thanks a lot for reading..
// sim is so happy.. it has started to drizzle. hehe..
@ nan: i wish i could be better than u - n mark my words - someday i will b better. but for now - u r the best!
@ jumper: :)
@ kido & EA: thanks.
@ Ghost particle: :)
@ anwesa: thank you!!
@ nairobi/song of sea: yeah! made you laugh... good job abhishek!
@ preetilata: yup. nice post. something like innocence... lingers in ur post. loved it!
@ pooja: glad u visited. thanks.
@ pankhuri: thanks a lot.
@ ramya: 55 fiction is the genre of short-story which uses 55 words or less...
@ abhinav: lol!
Yeah man! The first part is really my story. When people ask me in the morning,
"Machchhar Kaate kya?",
my reply is,
"Machchhar ko poochho!"
Hope the second part does not become my story though :P
if "a" is a word,then its 56 words..just felt like counting it :)
really this is super stuff...
if u dont find d suggestion weird,you may create a poll in this blog asking people if they counted the number of words wn they 1st read any of this 55F work...cant exactly fathom what it would indicate but i guess it will be throwing some light,on some significant enough idea :)
he he....
poor fellow....
what an embarrassing twist in the tale!
:) :D
@ stupidosaur: lol..
@ pyasa sajal: oops. thanks for pointing it out. :)
@ subhashree: :)
any more of these in the pipeline? they're hilarious!
:D
ps. thanks for passing by..
dude better be a XX species nxt time..or else i shall quit commenting :P
caressing seems to be ya fav word! ;)
Loved d word play.
hey abhi,
Hi
checked out this one..thought something romatic things are churning up!
But i ended laughing!!
Good work!
Genius!
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