The blue skies
And green leaves
Are so ordinary
When juxtaposed
Against a wall
Freshly whitewashed
Every passing gaze
Upon it rests admiringly
And the wall stands still
Like a proud man
Whilst the tree shakes
For attention
There is a wall on one side
And soon there will be
Three more
Enclosing the eye
In the cosy comforts
Of it's well-lit interiors
Then a window
Would be an innovation
When the whole mind
Could be free
For how else
Can a roof be without walls?
13 comments:
hey nice poem..i am happy to be the first commenter.....cheers
I need to say about a few things:
1. Marvelous verse. I'm just too astonished. I felt a different level of satisfaction reading it. If I hadn't read you earlier I would have said, "Have you written this?"
And I'm glad I won't say it now.
I feel indeed lucky to have read this.
2. The backdrop is amazing. Ethereal.
3. Nice dp. Ahan! :)
And yes, forgot to mention, candid about me.
**I am someone who loves to make literature out of things around me.
This made me smile. :)
Brilliant poem, loved the juxtaposition of the whitewashed wall and the tree...wonderful!! :)
1) Beautiful verse :)
2) Amazing new theme :)
3) BesHt profile pic :D
Had to read the poem a couple of times - still not sure how to interpret the last stanza...
Beautiful verse.
@ prajyot: thanks and welcome to my blog. :)
@ Tulika: it almost feels i am made to drink a super-concentrate sugar solution :) :D
@ Ayushi: i am glad you liked the poem.
@ Miss Kido: :) :) :)
@ Anubhav: nope. you are making a mistake if you are expecting a deep philosophy or message :P treat it like an amateurish experiment.
and i m curious to hear your interpretation.
Sim,
I did like to know about the amateurish experiment.
@ Tulika: sorry, didn't get you.. ?
**Then a window
Would be an innovation
When the whole mind
Could be free
For how else
Can a roof be without walls?
You've offered me food for thought. Still thinking about the above lines.
An unique poem I must say !
@ Anwesa didi: glad you liked the poem. :)
//Could be free
For how else
Can a roof be without walls?//
--Intriguing lines Abhishek. I wonder what made you ask that question. :-)
@ Himanshu: hmm.. sparked by a few things I have been thinking about recently - like increasing detachment from nature, involvement with man-made boundaries and tendency to justify the change.
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