3:35 Saturday
Adyar, Chennai.
Busy traffic. I am waiting for a bus.
Suddenly far away huge cry. A man appears first - running for life. Behind him some 14-15 people with hockey sticks in their hands.
"Somebody please - ha - ha - please - HELP - ..."
Nobody is doing anything.
At the end comes a cameraman filming the action.
[words used : 55 ]
P.S.: I read my first 55 fiction at the White Window. Dedicated to Preetilata.
14 comments:
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wowwwwwwwwwwwwww..... wat a surprise abhishek!!!
that was a fantastic 55F! i just loved the twist of it. fantastic work in just 55 words.
n u dedicated it to me!!! i am gonna treasure it forever. i feel happy n honoured.
write more n more wonderful stuffs.
take care. :)
d last line was d punch of the post.n i liked it too well.u'v inspired me 2 take up 55F in coming dez.
hehehe! great! i luv surprises! Filmy though!
hehe simple...outa box
just a query -
the title and the content dont go together..like why wud people go in bus at the time of riots or such things in front of them
thanks for reading...
@ joidevivre : yes. right. wrong title. oops. thanks for pointing out...
by riot I had meant the onset of riot. It's how riots start right? No notices. No prior information. A perfectly normal day - with normal traffic - people traveling in bus.. and then a bunch of religious fanatics just do it.
Nice and interesting. :) Never expected the ending to be like that.
Hey, the ending was too good :)
Sorry for the delay... Wasn't around for quiet sometime...
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@ ria: :)
@ kido: hey thanks kido! u r such a sweetheart... thanks gal.
wow... :P that was something.. like the end
this is my fav of all 55 fiction...the twist is really amazing :)
repeated stuff , looks like a bollywood story .. nice post anayway ..
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